Remember to utilize SPAG. You have quite a few run-on sentences.
For example this part:
My parents don’t have much money so they have to work very early to provide food and clothing wich means they cannot take me to school so I met the other children in the village at the foot of the mountain the two dads had medical kits and sledges on there backs we set off to school on the 3 mile mountain path
Could be rewritten like:
My parents don’t have much money, so to provide me with food and clothing they have to wake up very early to start work. This means they cannot take me to school. I therefore meet up with other children from the village at the foot of the mountain and we go to school together. Two of the children’s dads have medical kits and sledges that they have to bring on their backs….
Great work Alex!
Remember to utilize SPAG. You have quite a few run-on sentences.
For example this part:
My parents don’t have much money so they have to work very early to provide food and clothing wich means they cannot take me to school so I met the other children in the village at the foot of the mountain the two dads had medical kits and sledges on there backs we set off to school on the 3 mile mountain path
Could be rewritten like:
My parents don’t have much money, so to provide me with food and clothing they have to wake up very early to start work. This means they cannot take me to school. I therefore meet up with other children from the village at the foot of the mountain and we go to school together. Two of the children’s dads have medical kits and sledges that they have to bring on their backs….
Keep up the good work Alex!