Watch your tenses – if you start writing in the past tense you must continue to do so.
For example you wrote-
It can be a lot more safe for him and other people. On the other hand if he practised in an enclosed space like a house or a shopping mall he can hurt himself and other people.
What you could have written is-
It would be alot safer for himself and other people. On the other hand, if he practiced in an enclosed space like a hourse or a shopping mall he COULD hurt himself or another person.
Great work Alex,
Watch your tenses – if you start writing in the past tense you must continue to do so.
For example you wrote-
It can be a lot more safe for him and other people. On the other hand if he practised in an enclosed space like a house or a shopping mall he can hurt himself and other people.
What you could have written is-
It would be alot safer for himself and other people. On the other hand, if he practiced in an enclosed space like a hourse or a shopping mall he COULD hurt himself or another person.
Keep up the good work!
Thank you