hanging on by Ayub

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  1. sfallon says:

    Great work Ayub.
    Here are some tips:
    Instead of saying ‘She tried everything she climbed trees after trees to find their location,’
    I would have changed it to ‘She tried everything. Exhausted, she climbed tree after tree to find their new location.’

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