Hanging On by Isaac

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2 Responses to Hanging On by Isaac

  1. ddawson says:

    Well done Isaac,

    Remember to sign your posts with only your first name 🙂

    Your story uses a lot of descriptive language which makes your work interesting to read!

    Please try not to use a pronoun twice in one sentence- you must write the noun. Eg. Your wrote: Although the baby possums were scared of it they wouldn’t let it stop them from finding a new home.

    To be more specific you could have written:Although the baby possums were scared of the lightning they wouldn’t let it stop them from finding a new home.

  2. cloui says:

    thank you Miss Dawson for the compliment. I hope you are well.

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