Rumpelstiltskin Evie

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  1. sfallon says:

    Well done Evie, this is really great.

    However, when using direct speech the part the person is saying i.e. in the speech marks shouldn’t end with a full stop unless it is the end of the sentence. It should end with a comma, a question mark or an exclamation mark e.g. You have put:
    “Sorry I am not allowed to speak to strangers and I need to work. I shall see you out.” staggered the girl gripping her tattered dress tightly in her sore hands.

    But the girls speech is not the end of the sentence, the ‘….in her sore hands.’ is the end of the sentence so that’s where the full stop should go. Your sentence should look like this (with a comma after out)

    “Sorry, I am not allowed to speak to strangers and I need to work. I shall see you out,” staggered the girl gripping her tattered dress tightly in her sore hands.

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