Sonny this was a great effort with fantastic ideas, but you must slow down and pay closer attention to your spacing (you are not to leave a space before a fullstop), spelling, punctuation and grammar.
See how I have edited your writing:
A short man was waiting by the door; he wore tight black leggings with a kevlar coat and bloody hands .”If you give me 100 pounds in gold, I will set you free ”. Rumplestiltskin responded in a second.
”I’ll give you £ 20,000 if you set my friends out as well ”. It was a deal.
They shook hands, and Rumplestiltskin to the girl who started to weave gold.
After 2 hours of hard work, she had everything done. The short man was very greedy ” Ill just put this in my bank account, and I’ll come back .” but Rumpelstiltskin waited and waited and he did not come back.
Sonny this was a great effort with fantastic ideas, but you must slow down and pay closer attention to your spacing (you are not to leave a space before a fullstop), spelling, punctuation and grammar.
See how I have edited your writing:
A short man was waiting by the door; he wore tight black leggings with a kevlar coat and bloody hands .”If you give me 100 pounds in gold, I will set you free ”. Rumplestiltskin responded in a second.
”I’ll give you £ 20,000 if you set my friends out as well ”. It was a deal.
They shook hands, and Rumplestiltskin to the girl who started to weave gold.
After 2 hours of hard work, she had everything done. The short man was very greedy ” Ill just put this in my bank account, and I’ll come back .” but Rumpelstiltskin waited and waited and he did not come back.