Well done Jahmai, your ending is really in keeping with the tone of the story. It sounds like the author could have written this. I would have used the word ‘ascended’ rather than’ascending’ as it’s a story so should be in past tense and you could do with some punctuation e.g. a comma or a semi colon as the sentence is really quite long.
Well done Jahmai, your ending is really in keeping with the tone of the story. It sounds like the author could have written this. I would have used the word ‘ascended’ rather than’ascending’ as it’s a story so should be in past tense and you could do with some punctuation e.g. a comma or a semi colon as the sentence is really quite long.