Well done Evie, this was very moving, it made me quite upset! Poor Bees. I like how you started your paragraph with ‘The day went by smoothly until something bad happened.’ It really drew me in and I was eager to find out what was going to happen.
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Well done Evie, this was very moving, it made me quite upset! Poor Bees. I like how you started your paragraph with ‘The day went by smoothly until something bad happened.’ It really drew me in and I was eager to find out what was going to happen.