Well done Ayub, however in the first two paragraphs you were talking in 3rd person, calling the main character Sean. But in the third paragraph you started tallking in 1st person narrative using the pronoun ‘I’. You must be consistent with your narrtative voice, pick one and use it throughout.
Well done Ayub, however in the first two paragraphs you were talking in 3rd person, calling the main character Sean. But in the third paragraph you started tallking in 1st person narrative using the pronoun ‘I’. You must be consistent with your narrtative voice, pick one and use it throughout.