Whenever you write something always read over it e.g. this sentence is very very long ‘There were torches around me I was curiously looking around I saw the hole that I dramacically feel into, when I was trying to look for a rope or something to get back up I found my toy car that was lost and dads lawnmower and the flower pot with mums favourite flowers that were ALL from our garden!!!!!’ Remember to always include punctuation e.g. a comma after a fronted adverbial, a comma for en embedded clause (extra information) or make a few sentences really short for dramatic effect.
Well done Finn, lots of great work.
I love the phrase ‘chills went down my back’
Whenever you write something always read over it e.g. this sentence is very very long ‘There were torches around me I was curiously looking around I saw the hole that I dramacically feel into, when I was trying to look for a rope or something to get back up I found my toy car that was lost and dads lawnmower and the flower pot with mums favourite flowers that were ALL from our garden!!!!!’ Remember to always include punctuation e.g. a comma after a fronted adverbial, a comma for en embedded clause (extra information) or make a few sentences really short for dramatic effect.